I did it in layouts but I will include the text I wrote to organize the story. There aren't any words so I figured this would be the most effective way to get the story across.
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Page 1
the children sneaking behind their father as he goes out of the house and gets a knife from the barn.
Page 2
The children continue to follow their father as he goes to a pig chained in another part of the barn. They watch from above in the rafters while he kills it. Don't show the killing only their faces and a blurred image of their father above the dead pig and the blood.
Page 3
children playing. They leave the house and the panels follow them as they run around the prairie and forested areas. The last panel is them running through tall golden grass toward the barn.
Page 4
they arrive. They seem apprehensive about entering the barn but the older one steps through the door. They explore passing by the tools and the knife hanging on the wall. then they enter near the room where the father slaughtered the pig.
Page 5
The older one seems to get an idea and pulls the smaller one to the center of the room where he explains the idea. The younger one seems happy with the idea.
Page 6
the older brother goes to get the knife and the younger one runs from the room and passed his brother as he grabs the knife. He chases him out and they run through the grass toward the house.
Page 7
The mother, bathing a baby in a tub on the second floor looks out the window to see the brother chasing the other with the knife. She gasps and runs down stairs and out the door.
Page 8
by the time she reaches the front of the house the older brother has thrust the knife into his brothers neck and he is laying on the ground. She screams and runs to him knocking away the older brother who is standing over the body. She covers the dead boy with her body and weeps over him.
Page 9
She draws the knife from her son and moves toward the other boy holding the knife and pleading for an explanation. He backs against the house and she trips and falls into him. The knife goes into his chest.
Page 10
She goes crazy, grabs his body in her arms and runs into the house. She falls through the door and drops him in the small foyer. Lays on the ground and sobs uncontrollably and tears out her hair. the last panel is just her eyes, blood shot and insane.
Page 11
Several shots around the house. One close close shot of a truck. One of the younger boy in the yard. one of the tub on the second floor with the drowned baby and blowing curtains from the open window. another of the front door from the patio stairs with the broken door and blood strewn about with only the boys lower legs visible.
Page 12
one panel: The father in the door way in shadow. his son on the ground in front of him and in the close foreground the feet of his wife hang into the frame.
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